About Me Story
My "About Me Story" now sounds more precise and professional. It gets to the point quick and therefore doesn't last too long.
Before: I am a rising senior at Clemson University studying Mechanical Engineering. I plan to graduate in May of 2017.
After: Clemson University Mechanical Engineering student graduating in May of 2017.
Before: During my time at Clemson, I have had the opportunity to not only learn theory in my courses as an Undergraduate but also apply and practice these concepts in unique experiences.