"About Me" and Documentation Revision

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I discovered that I have way too many "I haves" and "this will be" terms that could easily be taken out or changed to make the writings sound better. I also realized that I have a problem with starting sentences with "I am" every time, especially in the "About Me." This process helped me realize these things and see where I need to make changes to my sentences.

"About Me"

Before:

I am currently interning at Bosch Rexroth in Fountain Inn in the quality department.

After:

Currently, I intern at Bosch Rexroth in Fountain Inn in the quality department.

Before:

On a three rotation schedule meaning I will be back in school in the fall, but will be interning again in the spring and following fall.

After:

I joined the Clemson cooperative education program, putting me on a three rotation schedule with the company meaning I return to class in the fall, but will intern again in the Spring and following Fall.

Documentation Project

Before:

The skills that I will be focusing on will be fixing the imperfections from lighting on the face, combining two photos, removing unwanted people or objects from a photo, using Smart Objects and using Smart Links.

After:

I will focus on the five skills of fixing the imperfections from lighting on the face, combining two photos, removing unwanted people or objects from a photo, using Smart Objects and using Smart Links because they are important to understanding and using Photoshop successfully.

Before:

Now, you can insert this photo wherever and it will be updated as the original is changed and saved.

After:

Now, wherever you place the photo, the updates appear as you make changes to the original.

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