Learning Module 5

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About Me Story Revisions

When rewriting my sentences I attempted to make them more direct and tried to orient the sentence so that the most important information was highlighted by the adjective before it.

Before:
I am interested in gaining an internship within the field of packaging science where I may use my current knowledge of packaging in a work environment to help better my education.

After:
Gaining an internship within the field of packaging science would allow me to use my current knowledge of packaging in a workforce environment allowing myself to learn using a more hands on approach.

Before:
To further my knowledge in leadership and learning through first hand experience being engaged in a community.

After:
Becoming engaged in a community would help give me the first had experience I would like to further my knowledge in leadership.

Documentation Revisions

Before:
Creating a x-ray vector image sounds like a difficult task however by following these steps one can begin to lean how to create professional designs relatively quickly using Adobe Illustrator.

After:
Everyone wants to be able to create professional designs quickly. Using my documentation of how to create an x-ray vector image one can do just that.

Before:
Knowing how to create an x-ray vector image will give the user the ability to create unique designs that stand apart from the rest of the crowd.

After:
Using the technique to create unique designs such as an x-ray vector image will give the user the ability to stand apart form the rest of the crowd.

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