Learning Module 6

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Before:
The Challenge: In this digital age, paying friends back for a meal or donating money to a small cause feels inconvenient especially since almost everything can be done on a smartphone. The creators of Venmo had the exact same thought, asking each other “Why are we still doing this?”

The Solution: Andrew and Iqram transformed their music sharing idea into a money sharing idea and quickly jumped into the project. They started by building a software that allowed the users to send money through text messages. When smartphones started to become more popular, they switched to an app format. In this application format they were able to create Venmo accounts that could hold and deal money like a bank account without having to actually connect it to a personal bank account.

After:
The Challenge: Paying friends back for a meal or donating money to a small cause can be quite inconvenient. The creators of Venmo had the exact same thought, asking each other “Why are we still doing this?” especially since almost everything we need to do it can be done on a smartphone.

The Solution: Andrew and Iqram transformed their music sharing idea into a money sharing idea and jumped quickly into the project. They started by building a software that allowed the users to send money through text messages. They switched to an application format when the use of smartphones started to become more popular. They were able to create Venmo an account that could hold and deal money without having to actually connect it to a personal bank account.

Follow up: My revisions made my content flow much better and in turn become easier to read as well as more concise and to the point. I most certainly have been able to read my revised editions much better than the originals. To make my content easier to read I put the modifiers closer to the words that they modify. And changed some tenses so that it flows better.

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