Learning Module 6

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Before
While intramural sports are open to club sports players, it is also necessary for clubs to have their own information. Now, IMLeagues is integrated into club sports, which means that all the paperwork that usually had to be filled out by hand, collected by the club officers, sorted, and turned into the club sports office is now filled out online and submitted online through IMLeagues by each person participating in the club sport. These forms include things such as the club sports waiver, the emergency contact information, trip planning forms (club officers), semester schedule (club officers), purchase request forms (club officers), and many more. Club events won’t be scheduled on this but every club will now be paperless when it comes to filling out forms for the club sports office, which is great because dealing with all of those papers and separating them for the office is always a hassle. In the very near future, because of the integration of club sports paperwork into IMLeagues, club activities and events will more than likely be integrated into this system, allowing people to sign up for events through one system that everyone has access to at any time.

After
While intramural sports are open to all club sports players, the clubs themselves need to have a way to handle all of their information. To solve this problem, IMLeagues is now integrated into club sports, lending a helping hand with all of the paperwork that needs to be filled out. Now, instead of filling out actual forms and handing them in, each club sport member can now fill out all of the paperwork online and submit it through IMLeagues. Some of these forms include the club sports waiver, emergency contact information, trip planning forms(club officers), semester schedule(club officers), purchase request forms(club officers), and many more. Club team events aren't able to be scheduled through this software yet, but every club will now be paperless when members fill out forms and turn them in. This is a great leap forward since it was such a hassle for club officers before. Club activities and events will more than likely be integrated into this system in the very near future since steps have already been taken to make the clubs paperless as far as forms go. This will be a great addition since it will allow people to sign up for club events through a single system that is readily available at any time.

Questions and Answers

What effect do your revisions have on your previous draft?
The revisions help the draft flow better, and make it easier to read.

Have you been able to make your revision easier to read?
Yes, there were a couple of sentences that I didn't have to change, but most of them were easily changed using "the 5 principles of readability".

What did you do to make it easier to read for your audience?
For the most part, condensed run on sentences or changed them into multiple so it doesn't run on forever. I also made sure to keep the agent and action verbs close together within my sentences.

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