Learning Module 6

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OLD: After releasing the software DoNotPay in August of 2015, Browder has made many advances in his software. He has created a messaging bot that actively answers the questions of users wanting to fight parking tickets. This bot answers questions relating to parking tickets, delayed flights/trains, and claiming payment protection insurance. The bot first asks questions and gathers details about a user’s scenario, then it can form documents and even send appeals. This bot works similarly in the way that Browder’s software works, but is more user friendly and has a conversation with users to produce more accurate results (Kleinman).

Browder’s services have been used by around 250,000 people and an impressive 160,000 citations have been successfully appealed (source). Based on an average parking ticket of £60, Browder has saved drivers an estimated £2 million in parking fines ("DoNotPay Creator…”). Browder is currently working on a bot that translates Arabic text into English documents to help Syrian refugees. In the future, he plans to expand his DoNotPay services to Seattle. Browder also plans to create new software that will be free to the public to help those who cannot afford specific services. (Kleinman).

NEW: In August of 2015, Browder released his software DoNotPay. Since then, Browder has made many advances in his software. His new messaging bot actively answers the questions of users who wish to fight their parking tickets. The new bot answers questions relating to parking tickets, delayed flights/trains, and claiming payment protection insurance. The bot first asks questions and gathers details about a user’s scenario, then it can form documents and even send appeals. This bot works similarly in the way that Browder’s software works, but is more user friendly and has a conversation with users to produce more accurate results (Kleinman).

An impressive 160,000 of 250,000 citations have been successfully appealed thanks to Browder's software. Based on an average parking ticket of £60, Browder has saved drivers an estimated £2 million in parking fines ("DoNotPay Creator…”). Browder is currently working on a bot that translates Arabic text into English documents to help Syrian refugees. He plans to expand his DoNotPay services to Seattle in the future. Browder also plans to create new software that will be free to the public to help those who cannot afford specific services. (Kleinman).

The revisions that I made on the paragraphs I chose have made my writing more readable. It is more directly to the point and uses an agent/action style so that it can be easily understood. My revisions are certainly easier to read than my original writing. I think revising a few sentences gives the reader more straight forward sentences with more natural english. Not as many words are twisted around and it is much more clear.

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