Paramedic Method

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Using the paramedic method, I revised some of my sentences so that they varied between short and long. I also revised some of the verbs. Here are some examples:

Here is how the paramedic method improved my About Me:

Before:
I am currently an intern at Clemson Online, where I do preliminary research for initiatives, create media using Adobe software, and participated in various other marketing activities.

After:
I am currently an intern at Clemson Online, where I conduct preliminary research for initiatives, create media using Adobe software, and market online education.

Before:
I am also a member of Clemson Engineers for Developing Countries, an organization committed to providing assistance to underdeveloped countries.

After:
I am also a member of a group on campus called Clemson Engineers for Developing Countries (CEDC). With CEDC, I do research to test the viability of projects to improve lives in Cange, Haiti.

Documentation Project:

Before:
In my experience, buiding resumes in Microsoft Word is incredibly frustrating and time-consuming.

After:
Resume design in Microsoft Word can be frustrating and time-consuming.

Before:
InDesign is so much easier to customize to your needs once you get past that initial learning curve.

Aftter:
InDesign is so much easier to customize, after learning how to use the software.

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