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Here is the before “”The Challenge”
Amyotrophic lateral sclerosis (ALS) is a disease that causes nerve damage, crippling both the brain and spinal cord and rendering a person with ALS paralyzed before eventually dying. The chart below summarizes the specific symptoms of this disease. Right now, there is no cure in sight, and many organizations/charities have been created to collect donations to research a cure for the disease.

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When so many people get their information 140 characters at a time it is extremely important to increase the followership of the @CUSportsMktg account. This can be done in a variety of different ways. One way would to be to interact with the other accounts more often. Looking through the feed of tweets and replies the marketing department does a good job with creating images that help advertise for the different sporting teams such as football and basketball. There are also a large number of retweets from the other accounts previously mentioned.

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OLD: After releasing the software DoNotPay in August of 2015, Browder has made many advances in his software. He has created a messaging bot that actively answers the questions of users wanting to fight parking tickets. This bot answers questions relating to parking tickets, delayed flights/trains, and claiming payment protection insurance. The bot first asks questions and gathers details about a user’s scenario, then it can form documents and even send appeals.

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Before: The Make-A-Wish Foundation provides hope, joy, and strength to children with life- threatening medical conditions by granting their wishes. On an average of every 21 seconds, Make-A-Wish makes a child’s wish a reality. The organization is active in almost fifty countries. They are responsible for granting over 350,000 wishes since 1980. Around eight thousand of these wishes are Disney related.

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The Context: Venmo was created by two young men who met in college and bounced from job to job as software engineers, but always dreamed of creating their own startup. These men are Iqram Magdon-Ismail and Andrew Kortina. They tried out a couple different ideas for a startup like “Swooge” and “Philafunk” before the idea of money sharing came to fruition.

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I evaluated the solution and what we learned section of my case study. Sometimes I tend to use run on sentences so while revising I fixed some sentences to be more precise and exact. Overall the revision has made it easier to read, and less confusing.

Some examples:
Twelve years later, the campaign is still in full swing
The campaign is still in full swing twelve years later.

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